From 9f9f04320c2ba512d640e153dd4feaf04b98d616 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: =?UTF-8?q?=E8=B7=A8=E6=80=A7=E5=88=AB?= Date: Sun, 21 Jan 2024 15:31:28 +0100 Subject: [PATCH] [+] English Improvements --- people/SS3B_0016/page.en.md | 20 ++++++++++---------- 1 file changed, 10 insertions(+), 10 deletions(-) diff --git a/people/SS3B_0016/page.en.md b/people/SS3B_0016/page.en.md index 57fd1fd3..d3787da6 100644 --- a/people/SS3B_0016/page.en.md +++ b/people/SS3B_0016/page.en.md @@ -7,9 +7,9 @@ info: ## Description -Yantian was our friend, they contributed to suicide intervention and other supports in transgender community, and accompanied others warmly and friendly. +Yantian was our friend, they contributed to suicide intervention and other supports in transgender community and accompanied others warmly and friendly. -Everyone liked them very much, and they got a intimate name “Sister Yantian”. +Everyone liked them very much, and they got an intimate name “Sister Yantian”. They were also a [railfan](https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Railfan), and their nickname originated from Shenzhen Metro Line 8 (also known as the Yantian Line). @@ -17,24 +17,24 @@ By coincidence, before they celebrated their 23rd birthday, Line 8 Phase 2 opene ## Their Departure and Our Memorial -At the end of 2023, Yantian was dealing with some trouble things happend in Guangdong. During this period, they overdrawn their energy, but they still overclocked (worked tirelessly) for everyone. +At the end of 2023, Yantian was dealing with some troublesome things happening in Guangdong. During this period, they overdrawn their energy, but they still overclocked (worked tirelessly) for everyone. -Owing to the need of maintaining better sleep, Yantian had been using sedatives for a long time, and their medication gradually exceeded the safe dose. +Owing to the need to maintain better sleep, Yantian had been using sedatives for a long time, and their medication gradually exceeded the safe dose. Plus, they had overdrawn their energy a lot. These factors put their physical and mental health in danger. Yantian unfortunately left us due to cardiac arrest on 12th January 2024. -One Among Us members were extremely shock and sad, too. -But we cannot push formal entry for them until people recovered from sadness. +One Among Us members were extremely shocked and sad, too. +But we cannot push formal entry for them until people recover from sadness. Based on this, We temporarily set up a small room for them, to make their memorial warmer in this severe winter. If you wish, you can share your memory with Yantian by comment. -> Tips: Your comments and memories in this memorial page will be considerated to be **referenced** by default. One Among Us editors will complete their formal entry with your helps. We will retain all approved comments in their formal entry. +> Tips: Your comments and memories on this memorial page will be considered to be **referenced** by default. One Among Us editors will complete their formal entry with your help. We will retain all approved comments in their formal entry. > -> If you don't hope your comment to be referenced, please mark out. +> If you don't hope your comment to be referenced, please mark it out. > -> You can send email to [info@one-among.us](mailto:info@one-among.us) to contribute photos or other rich text, or submit issue to our [Github repository](https://github.com/one-among-us/data). +> You can send an email to [info@one-among.us](mailto:info@one-among.us) to contribute photos or other rich text or submit an issue to our [Github repository](https://github.com/one-among-us/data). -Yantian, have a good rest...have a good sleep. Thank you for your efforts all this time. \ No newline at end of file +Yantian, have a good rest...have a good sleep. Thank you for your efforts all this time.