[U] Update entry for yumao

- 修复了部分语法错误
- 优化了一些句子的表达

people/yumao/page.en.md

@@ -27,7 +27,7 @@ According to Neko, Yumao loved spicy hot pot, and always enjoyed it with rice.
 
 Yumao liked to watch stars when she didn't sleep yet at night. After she returned to China, due to bad weather and few time, she couldn't watch stars as previous time. So [she made a special trip to Dishui Lake once and watched stars](https://web.archive.org/web/20210517104313/https://oao.moe/archives/834/).
 
-She saved many thoughts in her [private blog](https://web.archive.org/web/20210420170241/https://oao.moe/archives/), and these blog posts included many areas: computer science, military and politics. She was also a girl who loved literature, and she wrote down much beautiful prose and poetry. Of course, she record daily life in her blog, and we can still see her story, her experience, and her train of thoughts.
+She saved many thoughts in her [private blog](https://web.archive.org/web/20210420170241/https://oao.moe/archives/), and these blog posts included many areas: computer science, military and politics. She was also a girl who loved literature, and she wrote down much beautiful prose and poetry. Of course, she recorded daily life in her blog, and we can still see her story, her experience, and her train of thoughts now.
 
 ## Experience
 
@@ -41,9 +41,9 @@ During that time, Yumao got many mental supports. Yumao described the care from
 
 > "Even that things were dark and painful, which had been hidden, you still observed and felt them. Maybe you understanded more then myself. How wonderful... You also found my scattered identity, then lifted me out of abyss. That was the first time I was been touched by others."
 
-However, they were forced to separated. After that, Neko was brought back to Yunnan by family, and was sent to correctional school. Then, it was reported that Neko had commited suicide and died. Chinese media *Beijing News* reported this in video. Yumao was extremely grieved after hearing the news. She continuously sent messages about missing Neko in their Telegram channal. She quoted *Cassiopeia(カシオペヤ)* , which was a song they used to listen together, to express her grief.
+However, they were forced to separate. After that, Neko was brought back to Yunnan by family, and was sent to correctional school. Then, it was reported that Neko had commited suicide and died. Chinese media *Beijing News* reported this in video. Yumao was extremely grieved after hearing the news. She continuously sent messages about missing Neko in their Telegram channal. She quoted *Cassiopeia(カシオペヤ)* , which was a song they used to listen together, to express her grief.
 
-Although she also found that the suicide of Neko ws complicated and confusing according to some routes. But there was no more news about Neko indeed. She really hoped Neko was still alived:
+Although she also found that the suicide of Neko was complicated and confusing according to some routes. But there was no more news about Neko indeed. She really hoped Neko was still alived:
 
 > "I always stay alive for you...I get lost cuz missing you. Wish I can see a vibrant you."
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@@ -53,7 +53,7 @@ She always missed Neko, and recalled the days with her. Yumao often wrote down s
 
 In this period, Yumao tried to remember previous time and those things which is moving, happy and blissful. But her heart was took up by sadness, and her memory gradually worsen. She said that she forgot many things.
 
-She formerly planned to complete SRS within the year, but she didn't realize that cause of her bad mental health and other reasons.
+She formerly planned to complete SRS within the year, but she didn't realize that because of her bad mental health and other reasons.
 
 In 30th June, all hope of her had been removed and she tried to commit suicide. The next day, she left this world with regrets at her age of 17.
 
@@ -78,7 +78,7 @@ Transgender cummunity investigated this thing once, and found the fact that Neko
 
 Neko and Yumao were forced to seprate in Shanghai. After that, Neko was brought to Kunming, Yunnan, and then hospitalized at a mental health centre for treatment.
 
-During the time, Neko always hoped to meet with Yumao, so she tried to contact Yumao in the interval outside the hosptial when she haved dinner with her parents. Then she persuaded the doctor on duty to issue discharge certificate for her. This action irritated her family. Shortly afterward, her family drived her to Kunming Anning Haohaizi School (hereinafter referred to as "*Haohaizi") made use of taking her to Changshui Airport. After that, Neko was locked in the Room 308, which can be seen as a black room.
+During the time, Neko always hoped to meet with Yumao. She had dinner with her parents and got a interim leave from the hosptial, then she tried to contact Yumao in this time gap. After their contact, she persuaded the doctor on duty to issue discharge certificate for her. This action irritated her family. Shortly afterward, her family drived her to Kunming Anning Haohaizi School (hereinafter referred to as "*Haohaizi") in the name of taking her to Changshui Airport. After that, Neko was locked in the Room 308, which can be seen as a black room.
 
 Days after she came out of the Room 308, owing to her command of computer was excellent and their trust in her, the propaganda department of Haohaizi found her and asked her to fix network system. Neko accepted and fixed the system quickly, then sent a help email to Yumao.
 
@@ -90,7 +90,7 @@ Neko was continued to be in Haohaizi since then. She was informed of Yumao's dea
 
 But nevertheless, Neko still implemented the words "Must stay alive". She never gave up and tried to calm herself. She kept a diary and develpoed her hobbies and interests at that time. She also found some ways which could resolve her difficulties to take her mind off.
 
-During the latter time in Haohaizi, those around her helped her a lot, her friends accompanied her, and some people delivered things from the outside. Some friendly drillmaster would take her out to play, or bought things to her. This might make her happier.
+During the latter time in Haohaizi, those around her helped her a lot, her friends accompanied her, and some people delivered things from the outside. Some friendly drillmasters would take her out to play, or bought things to her. This might make her happier.
 
 On 1st September 2019, Neko left Haohaizi, and started her new life after a period of time.