From ed441276c1407bd87e62a770ac13d10997a4342a Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Aquaticat Date: Mon, 27 Jan 2025 17:35:21 -0500 Subject: [PATCH] Fix some issues in saurikissa/page.en found by Grammarly This is an incomplete fix. The document can be further improved. --- people/saurikissa/page.en.md | 73 ++++++++++++++++++------------------ 1 file changed, 36 insertions(+), 37 deletions(-) diff --git a/people/saurikissa/page.en.md b/people/saurikissa/page.en.md index bf7531b1..66e66436 100644 --- a/people/saurikissa/page.en.md +++ b/people/saurikissa/page.en.md @@ -7,49 +7,48 @@ info: ## Story -When Shuiyue stepped into the vast realms of the internet under her present name, it wasn’t met with trust or open arms. -She didn’t shy away from her youthful naivete, those impulsive days embedded in the controversial culture of "Esu." -Now, she carries her past as a tale of caution, offering wisdom to friends on shielding their private lives -from the stormy gales of online transphobia and cruelty. +When Shuiyue stepped into the vast realms of the internet under her present name, she was met with suspicion. +She was transparent about her missteps when she was a child; she participated in *Esu* culture (an online movement that seeks to bully everyone with supposedly deviant behaviours). +After she realized the dangers of *Esu* culture, she hoped to use her experience to help friends protect their personal information and reduce the cruelty online for trans people. -Friends, however, were scarce. -The shadow of her history cast its long, uneasy doubts, keeping many at bay. -Her struggles with bipolar disorder unfolded as impulsive spending—an army of AirPods, -neatly aligned in a row, though she swore, “They’re all fake.” -And when regret would creep like a thief in the night, she’d lament, -“If only I hadn’t squandered so much… My surgery fund would be ready by now.” +She didn’t have many friends. +The shadows of her history cast its long, uneasy doubts, keeping many at bay. +Her struggles with bipolar disorder manifested as impulsive spending—an army of AirPods neatly aligned in a row. +As she swore, “They’re all fake.” +And when regret crept in, she’d lament, +“If only I hadn’t squandered so much…I would have saved up enough money for the surgery.” -Seeking solace and counsel, she posed a question in her circle of confidantes: -“What advice do you all have for me?” +Seeking solace and counsel, she posed a question to her confidantes: +“What advice do you all have for me?” And the candid replies poured in: -"Don’t flaunt wealth, don’t lose yourself to madness, don’t walk hand in hand with Esu’s lingering shadows." +“Don’t flaunt wealth, don’t go mad, don’t keep in contact with people involved in *Esu*.” -“All right. Got it. I’ll start immediately.” -But who knows if her promises took root in action or whimsy? +“All right. Got it. I’ll start immediately.” +But who knows if she kept her promises? -"Not going mad—that’s the hard part,” -she’d confessed with a wicked grin. "I’ve got this itch to stir chaos now and then." -“Oh, you troublesome, endearing soul," we’d sigh. +“Don’t go mad—that’s the hardest part,” +she’d confessed with a wicked grin. +“I’ve got this itch to stir chaos now and then.” +“Oh, you troublesome, endearing soul,” we’d sigh. -“The madness, it seems, is in my marrow now—beyond cure or reach.” +“The madness, it seems, is in my marrow now—beyond reach, incurable.” But beneath the whimsical storms, she was still the girl in the sailor-style uniform, -adorned with a blue ribbon, peddling absurd humor with a pure, radiant laugh. -Her joys lingered in the glow of digital gadgets and their intricate riddles. +adorned with a blue ribbon, peddling absurd humour with a pure, radiant laugh. +Her joys lingered in the glow of digital gadgets and their intricate riddles. In her modest and cluttered abode, treasures lay scattered—cassette tapes, phones, hard drives, stickers— each sorted with loving precision. -Some sealed neatly in boxes, labeled in her tidy scrawl. -I’d secretly wonder if she held a penchant for collecting duplicates—artifacts in mirroring rows. -To her, data security was religion. Backups, an unspoken vow. +Some were sealed neatly in boxes, labelled in her tidy handwriting. +I’ve secretly wondered if she held a penchant for collecting duplicates—artifacts in mirroring rows. +To her, data security was like a religion. Backups, an unspoken vow. -She had a collection of glasses, fitted identically to her prescription, -as if each lens held its own intimate history, etched into her memory. +She had a collection of glasses fitted identically to her prescription, +as if each lens held its intimate history and was etched into her memory. Yet she wasn’t confined to her small, crowded sanctuary. No, not Shuiyue. -When the weight of her mind lifted, she flitted from place to place, -sometimes journeying to friends in faraway Changchun. +Whenever Shuiyue wasn’t depressed, she travelled from place to place, sometimes visiting friends in distant Changchun. Often, she’d parade photos of her cat with unmasked pride—though her family loathed the feline spirit. -As for her own unpopularity with certain souls, she met it not with ire, but disheartened sighs. +As for her unpopularity with certain souls, she met it not with ire but disheartened sighs. Love had knocked at her door time and time again, but it was a pattern cruelly familiar—a yearning for love, a longing to be loved. @@ -57,14 +56,14 @@ She eventually walked a path of playful rivalry and friendship with someone she Their bond deepened during a brief cohabitation in Dongguan. Yet, shadows loomed—gender dysphoria, body image battles, and the persistent echo of mental unrest haunted her. -The thought of turning out her flame—it lingered in silent corners of her mind. +The thought of leaving this world lingered in her mind. When news of Youhun’s death reached Shuiyue, it struck her like a thunderclap. -"How could she go before me? I’m still here," she whispered, shaken. -And then came sorrow’s flood: "But as soon as she left, my balance wavered. -Me—soft-hearted, crumbling at anyone’s passing as though my soul, too, would shatter." +“How could she go before me? I’m still here,” she whispered, shaken. +And then came sorrow’s flood: “But as soon as she left, my balance wavered. +Me—soft-hearted, crumbling at anyone’s passing as though my soul, too, would shatter.” Her voice trembled with a selfless plea: -"Could I trade my life for hers? Bring her existence back, restore her sanity to its fullest bloom?” +“Could I trade my life for hers? Bring her existence back and restore her sanity bar to the max?” Three days after Youhun’s departure, an acquaintance reached out to Shuiyue. Sensing her fragility, they sought to comfort her, to find someone who might stand vigil through her long and dark hours. @@ -72,10 +71,10 @@ But alas, no one arrived. “Darling, please don’t follow her. If you show up chasing her into the afterlife, she’ll be *so* annoyed with you.” -"I’m joking!" Shuiyue laughed, her bravado laced with defiant fragility. -"I’m terrified of death—I’d never actually go through with it. +“I’m joking!” Shuiyue laughed, her bravado laced with defiant fragility. +“I’m terrified of death—I’d never actually go through with it. You think I’d die for her? Please, I haven’t even lived enough yet. -What nonsense is there to fear?" +What nonsense is there to fear?” In this final exchange with her friend Shu, her words danced with denial and trembling strength. Less than a week later, her passing was confirmed by Aypasha, a dear friend from her brightest days.